Fallout: Equestria - Rising Dawn (Looking for Critiques)

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Fallout: Equestria - Rising Dawn (Looking for Critiques)

Post by Interloper » Sat Sep 27, 2014 1:30 am

Hello, y'all. Name's Interloper. I didn't realize this forum existed until just this morning ... but I've been around on Fimfiction for about nine months now. Anyways, this is my first OP here. Seeing as this is some kind of 'get help' or 'shameless advertisement' forum, I guess I'll do just that.

I'm currently writing an FO:E sidestory of about 160,000 words so far called: Rising Dawn. Rising Dawn, told from the perspective of a stable dwelling Unicorn stallion named Red Dawn, takes place in the Northern Wasteland, a vast, desolate region that encompasses the remains of the Crystal Empire, and much of the wintry Equestrian North.


When the bombs fell, the North was not reborn in spellfire. It was reborn in darkness. 200 years ago, the Crystal Empire kept at bay the nightmares of the Frozen North. But when balefire scoured their lands, the floodgates parted and an inexplicable, aberrant darkness fell upon the Northern Wasteland.

As the world above plunged into perpetual twilight, the ponies of Stable 91 slept peacefully beneath the snow. But their sheltered lives could never have lasted forever. Time could only tell when their systems would shutdown, or their water became impure … or … worse.

In the Northern Wasteland, a broken water talisman is the least of anypony's problems - for outside those doors, only darkness awaits.
I usually update with a new Chapter every two weeks, but since I'm heading out to college, that may change, and the time in between updates may become longer.

I'm currently on the look out for Critiques, whether they be Chapter by Chapter, the entire story so far as a whole, or whatever and however many Chapters you fancy. I respond well to and appreciate feedback of any kind, whether it be negative or positive.

If you're interested in reading, reviewing, or checking out Rising Dawn, I've provided a link to its Fimfiction page.

I also make all the art for my story (including the cover art above), so if you're interested in seeing my gallery, there's a link below for that as well.

Link to Story: Fimfiction
Link to Gallery: Deviantart
Link to Wiki Category: FO:E Wiki (Articles may contain spoilers)
"If only the speed of Rule 34 could be harnessed as propulsion for spacecraft, we'd have colonized other galaxies by now." - Foobaria, e621.net

Link to my sidestory:
Fallout: Equestria - Rising Dawn
"After the fall of the Crystal Empire, the only bastion to the nightmares of a Fallen King, darkness scoured the northern wasteland. When the ponies of Stable 91 opened their doors to this nightmarish world, the light never touched their faces again."

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